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#83607 - 09/25/12 03:56 AM 5 PoemsAbout YouThat HaveNothingToDoWithYou

YesikaStarr Offline
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i don't like giving disclaimers before sharing a poem BUT im gonna do it anyway. this isn't my best performance of this piece. i was totally caught off guard and asked to calibrate in a slam. But, this is my favorite poem to perform and the only recording i have of it to date. so boom. thanks for listening either way!

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#83620 - 09/25/12 04:32 AM Re: 5 PoemsAbout YouThat HaveNothingToDoWithYou [Re: YesikaStarr]

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Registered: 11/18/08
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I actually like this. you for some reason look uncomfortable maybe its just me
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#83626 - 09/25/12 04:40 AM Re: 5 PoemsAbout YouThat HaveNothingToDoWithYou [Re: J. Whiting]

YesikaStarr Offline
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i was completely uncomfortable. i had no intentions of performing and had just come into the room from doing something in the back and i was told i had to do a poem to kill time while the teams drew numbers. there was a lot of commotion in the room while i was on stage and well, it was a learning experience i suppose lol.
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#83679 - 09/25/12 01:16 PM Re: 5 PoemsAbout YouThat HaveNothingToDoWithYou [Re: YesikaStarr]

tre g. Offline
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Its and good poem, but I agree the lack of comfort takes away from the perfomance. YOu look a li'l nervous and breath control suggests it too! P.S. I was happy to meet you at InkSlam!
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#83764 - 09/25/12 07:17 PM Re: 5 PoemsAbout YouThat HaveNothingToDoWithYou [Re: tre g.]

bellaHina Offline
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Registered: 09/20/12
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even with the uncomfortable feelings inside of you,it was hardly noticeable, you still had presence and a great vibe. but the poem spoke for itself and I thought it was good. anywho, serious props for taking the stage when you didn't even intend to do a poem in the first place.

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#83828 - 09/25/12 10:07 PM Re: 5 PoemsAbout YouThat HaveNothingToDoWithYou [Re: bellaHina]

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Yes! Yes! I did not feel the discomfort at all actually. I think the third and last poems were my favorites. I love how you brought them all together at the end, whereas I couldn't see how one fit in with the other before that. I am so proud of you, how you stand in front of crowds and bare your soul. So brave.
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#84611 - 10/01/12 12:18 PM Re: 5 PoemsAbout YouThat HaveNothingToDoWithYou [Re: JasLee]

Kaztro Offline
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Registered: 11/17/08
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Beauty is in the eye of the beholder indeed. I see a butterfly that had come out of her cocoon. well done.
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#84925 - 10/04/12 01:57 AM Re: 5 PoemsAbout YouThat HaveNothingToDoWithYou [Re: Kaztro]

Siulan Offline
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I loved this, nervousness/being flustered didn't register, and even if it did you somehow channeled it into something positive.. Hmm, there's something captivating about the way you speak. I like how you emphasize the right parts and speed up and slow down at the right parts... it felt so natural.
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#86395 - 11/10/12 02:26 PM Re: 5 PoemsAbout YouThat HaveNothingToDoWithYou [Re: Siulan]

methods Offline
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Registered: 11/30/08
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Loc: Brooklyn, NY
You are captivating. There was little nervousness that showed through and it probably showed only because of your disclaimer proclaiming it. This piece(s) only grew stronger as it went along. Good job.
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#86416 - 11/12/12 09:53 PM Re: 5 PoemsAbout YouThat HaveNothingToDoWithYou [Re: methods]

Legacy Leonard Offline
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Registered: 11/30/08
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Ahhh, mamita, I love your honesty, how you strip the heart down, and leave it raw and beating in my hands.
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#87102 - 06/02/18 09:05 AM Re: 5 PoemsAbout YouThat HaveNothingToDoWithYou [Re: Legacy Leonard]

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